hey everyone,i'm in the middle of editing my essay and was wondering if anyone wants to read it and give me suggestions? i'll send it to the first 2 ppl who comment with their e-mails (only 2 cos i'm totally paranoid obviously). i'll be happy to read your essay too. :)thanks in advance.
I'm making final corrections to my essay so would anyone be willing to proofread it before I send it in? I'll look over anyone else's in return.
Anyone interested in proof-reading two essays? I have a priority application due the first, and so I'd appreciate it if someone would mind doing a final read-over of my essays
That was the first step. The problem with it is that it is 729 words and I need it to be about 500 for the Common App and around 600 for the UC app. I'm using it as the "topic of your choice essay" for the Common App, so I'm able to cut out a lot of things and change things around, but I'm not sure what should stay and what should go. For the UC app, I'm using it as the "explain more about certain aspects of your life" essay. Obviously that one has got a stricter structure I have to followSo I guess what I really need to know is what I can afford to cut out and what is actually needed to keep the essay on topic.I have the essay uploaded, so if you're interested in helping me edit it, that would be just great. Leave me your e-mail address and I'll give you the link.I'm willing to trade essays to edit if you've got one you want edited, too. :)My e-mail address is: firstname.lastname@example.org
Okay, so I've written two essays. It has taken me months to accomplish this, because I keep rewriting and changing topics and wishing I were dead. Yeah, it's been tough.The bottom line is both my essays are over the word limit and neither is really about ME. I would like some people to read one or both of them and answer some specific questions.1) Does it need to be more about me and my accomplishments? How could I integrate this?2) What should I cut out? I've got considerable logorrhea so don't be nice.3) Should I just start over? I have plenty of time and am really not averse to going back to square one if the essay won't cut it. I want to get into college, not have my feelings spared. Believe me, I know these are not prime examples of my work. I mentally flip myself out every time I sit down to write an admissions essay.4) Is this a stereotypical, boring admissions essay? Again, don't try to be kind, because neither of these stories is about anything too near and dear. Believe me. In exchange, I will do the same for any of you. I would prefer not to edit anything for grammar as that's really difficult over the computer, but I will give you opinions, suggestions, et cetera. Leave your e-mail if you're interested. Mine is email@example.com, if you want to send your essay my way. You can even pick your poison, if you choose to read one of mine. I have an essay about my boyfriend Library Boy, and his retarded antics, and one about my DEFLOWERED Mormon best friend! Don't be afraid to request!Please guys, I'm desperate. I'm even going to use the sad smiley :(
For anyone who knows anything about the UC essays: do they want a broad, general "I did x, y, z and this therefore makes me special," or a specific incident/experience/anecdote that illustrates and brings to light a certain quality? I'm not sure whether I can take a specific project I did last year and use that for my academic preparation one, or if that'd be far too specific. Also, would extreme nerdiness count as a personal quality that would contribute to the UC environment? XD
Ah, so I'm back to asking a question again...1) For once in an essay, I have way TOO much to write. I am about 250 words over the limit. Granted, this is my first draft, but I feel as if that's pretty noticeable. However, most of my schools don't care, or their boxes allow me to paste my essay in, no problem. If I revise my essay, and it's final after a time, and I want to send it even though it's WAY over the limit, would that be so horrible? (I know they don't count every word, but still...)2) Can someone help me with my essay? If you're willing, please leave your email or email me at firstname.lastname@example.org. I'd love to get some help with my essay, and give out help too. :)Thanks!x-posted to college_help.
I wrote six essays today...three are basically the same essay (why our school?), but it makes me feel more accomplished if I think I wrote six.Anyway, anyone interested in reading? I have my ED deadline coming up (1 November) and the Middlebury deadline, which, for some strange reason, is before the RD deadline of every other school in the world. Any readers for those or any of my supplements would be much appreciated (and, as an added bonus, I'll edit yours if you want). Comment with your email, and I'll send them to you.And for anyone who's curious, I'm applying to: Dartmouth ED (no essay supplements), Smith (why Smith and how did you hear about Smith), Middlebury (a time your values were tested), Wesleyan (no essay suppelements), Vassar (why Vassar), Cornell (academic interests and why the specific college), Mt. Holyoke (why Mt. Holyoke), and American (how did you hear about American). I'm also applying to Queen's, but in the wonderful tradition of Canadian schools, they don't require any essays.
Few Questions:Can your essay go over the 500 word limit (common app)?- mine is 550, I really like my extra 50 words.What do you think about topic of choice?- I used topic of choice to describe one event in my life, it was similar to choice #1, but I'm not sure if I'd meet the guidelines. An off-topic essay doesn't help no one.Did you write your personal statement in the same style as your essay?How many people are going to use the second essay option?-I heard I should do this.... I'm not sure what I want to do though.Anyway, just some random thoughts / questions for now.
If you're interested in starting up a buddy system (one or two people to read your essays) please either post your email here, or make your own post and include what you're looking for. I'll start us off...Hi I'm Lynne, and I'm applying to Brown, UNC Chapel Hill, Boston U, American U, Salisbury U, Rutgers U, Maryland, and James Madison U. About 4 of those schools take the common application and a good number take personal statements.I'm having THE hardest time with Rutger's personal statement. If you're willing to help me out, I can either post it here, or email you. Just comment and let me know with your email! Thanks!